#WriteBravely – Echo (120 words)

I am taking part in the Write Tribe Festival of Words.

And today’s prompt is –

 

A broken mirror reflecting a calm person

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ECHO

“I am leaving,” she said. He looked at her, like a patient mother would at her errant child urging him to explain.

“I am tired of taking initiatives – I proposed to you, I fixed the date of our wedding, I chose this house… it is always ME! I can’t take the lead anymore while you wait for things to happen,” she erupted.

He didn’t understand why should that be a problem? One leads, another follows. But his face remained calm.

“Please say something – shout, cry or slap me hard, just don’t keep sitting there like a Buddha,” she pleaded.

She shook her head, picked up her bag and slammed the door hard. He felt its reverberation for a long time.

(120 words)

 

 

About Anshu Bhojnagarwala

Fiction Addict. Agatha Christie Fan.
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28 Responses to #WriteBravely – Echo (120 words)

  1. Balaka says:

    Good she left..nice flash fiction Anshu.

  2. Felt the echoes of this story, Anshu.

  3. Good one. Such one side relationships rarely work.

  4. Meena says:

    Good one Anshu. I am happy for her, but I would like to know why he chose to be that way. I want to know his side of the story.

  5. Esha M Dutta says:

    You’ve spun a nice tale on the prompt, Anshu. Can hear the echoes even after the story is over!

  6. Akshata Ram says:

    Was he really a useless partner or just too calm and composed? Seems like she did the right thing.

  7. Anagha Yatin says:

    Inaction is often taken as indifference. Thus she has a valid and solid reason to desert. Good one Anshu.

  8. Kalpana Solsi says:

    some people prefer to to follow and take orders. and some are happy to lead from the front and take all decisions.

  9. Madhavi says:

    “Like a Buddha”… is what she said. No wonder she was tired of his inertness. Well written!

  10. Shilpa Garg says:

    Good that she took this decision. One-sided relationships tend to be exhausting for the partner who is the most invested in the relationship. Good one for the prompt, Anshu!

  11. Bhagyashree says:

    Some people are like that …laidback. she would have suffered if she stayed with him

  12. Nice take on the prompt.

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