Little Wish

PHOTO PROMPT © Priya Bajpai

Written for Friday_Fictioneers 

Little Wish

“Can I read just one wish?” Rita asked.

“No!”

“Just a tiny peek!”

“If you read the wish, then God won’t grant it. You should know better, mum,” Thea answered matter-of-factly.

That night, after Thea went to sleep, Rita couldn’t help herself. She had to see what her daughter wrote meticulously each night and put in the mason jar on the dining table.

She opened a yellow one.

“Please send little Theo back.” It read.

Rita opened another one. The same five words. She read all the chits and all had just one wish.

 

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About Anshu Bhojnagarwala

Fiction Addict. Agatha Christie Fan.
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65 Responses to Little Wish

  1. Neethu says:

    Was Theo supposed to be the brother di???

  2. Dear Anshu,

    Touching tale. And it’s left up to the reader to know who little Theo is. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  3. So cute a story. But who’s Theo? Is it some fictional character?
    Regards,SLSM.
    https://stilllovedstillmissed.wordpress.com/2019/01/09/sweet-tooth/

  4. Gosh, that was so thought provoking. I wonder what the mother thought? Excellent story.

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    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  5. I initially mis-read this as the two names are so similar, but got it once I re-read it!

  6. ceayr says:

    Painfully sad tale.
    Loss of a child is every parent’s worst nightmare.

  7. granonine says:

    A world of sadness there. Nicely done.

  8. trentpmcd says:

    Very well done. A sad little tale.

  9. Anita says:

    Really hope little Theo is back and all her wishes are granted.
    Innocent tale. Want to believe Theo has gone to a family-member’s place or boarding school from where he can be back…
    Another Try – Anita

  10. michael1148humphris says:

    Mum has crossed the line, Thea won’t be pleased

  11. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve crafted a poignant story. I like the matter-of-fact rebuke that Thea gives her mother.

  12. Abhijit Ray says:

    Sweet story. What happened to little Theo?

  13. Sandra says:

    Sad but sweet tale.

  14. Oh my goodness. Without telling you have made me feel sad…

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  15. Heartbreaking, all she wanted was her little brother back

  16. 4963andypop says:

    Two possibilities come to mind: one, the disgruntled big sister wanting to send the baby back to wherever it came from. The second is that Little Theo has died and she misses him. The first makes me smile and the second makes my heart ache. Well done!

  17. subroto says:

    Theo could be anyone, a sibling, a pet but the feeling of loss comes through. A bitter-sweet story.

  18. Dale says:

    Sad and innocent wish for something that cannot be. Well done, Anshu

  19. Is Theo her brother or friend? What happened to him? So many questions in that sad ending.

  20. Priya says:

    What a sad tale, Anshu! It left so many questions unanswered. Do write a sequel, please. Would love to read it.

  21. Liz Young says:

    Whether she read them or not, I suspect Theo isn’t coming back. Very sad.

  22. Anna Rymer says:

    This is amazing ha!! I love the premise – of course a wish jar – and the way you’ve reversed the roles of the mother and child initially 🙂 And the wish! Brilliant 😊
    Weirdly, I went down a similar route but looking back on the sibling relationship 😊

    • Anna Rymer says:

      Oh!! I totally read this as a big sister wanting to send her brother back!! Which is very funny!
      Wishing for her brother to come back is in the other hand heartbreaking xx
      The ambiguity is really good though!

      • Thank you so much Anna. As a young child everyone wishes to send their siblings back, but guess when they actually aren’t around, you miss them. Little Thea wants Theo back..but not all wishes can be fulfilled.

  23. lisarey1990 says:

    This is so heartbreaking. Beautifully told.

  24. Suchita says:

    Innocent turning to heartbreaking. Love this interpretation.

  25. Rowena says:

    Anshu, this was really beautiful, poignant and so tragic. I belong to the muscular dystrophy association and I have heard some tragic stories through the years of families losingparticularly sons way too young.This group does try to support the siblings aware of the huge impact it also has on them.This story captures all of those emotions and I wonder if this will change how the mother handles her own grief and will she go to greater lengths to shelter the daughter from it. A very interesting and philosophical piece. Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

    • Rowena, thanks for writing to me. My nephew who had muscular dystrophy passed away on 14th Dec. He was almost 27. His maternal uncle had the same thing. The mother is the carrier and the son the sufferer. It’s so difficult to see your child being wasted away day after day before your very eyes. You are doing a great job, Rowena.

  26. Violet Lentz says:

    Sounds like a bit of sibling rivalry to me.. very clever!

  27. StuHN says:

    That probably ripped mom’s heart apart.

  28. Perfectly done, very sad

  29. Sad story. Hopefully the mother’s interference won’t ruin Thea’s wish.

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