New beginnings #FridayFictioneers

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Linking to Rochelle Wisoff’s Friday Fictioneers

She delighted in the absence of the shoes. 13 years she had lived with them, seeing them every day parked at the front door, a grim reminder of the hurt, misery and shame of his abandonment. She couldn’t bring herself to throw them.

Many suitors came, but she was wedded to the shoes. Until yesterday, when he decided to show up, all smile and hope. Looking at him, grey and creased, fired an emotion long dead in her. The will to live. She put the shoes in his hands and closed the door on his face.

About Anshu Bhojnagarwala

Fiction Addict. Agatha Christie Fan.
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39 Responses to New beginnings #FridayFictioneers

  1. Dear Anshu,

    A lot of story layered between the lines. Good for her. Well done.



  2. Sandra says:

    So much in here, beside the simple act of returning his shoes. Nicely done.

  3. A well crafted complex piece. I’m so glad she can now move on.

  4. jillyfunnell says:

    It seems that now she can get on with her life. Good story.

  5. Intricately woven. Until the last 6 words I did not know how she was going to react, thought she’d be the good wifie, you know. Glad for the last words! Thanks.

  6. Iain Kelly says:

    Great story, it’s like she just needed that chance to shove those shoes in his face! 🙂

  7. Priya says:

    Good call. He deserved it, didn’t he?

  8. Abhijit Ray says:

    Shoes are gone. Finally she is free. Or is she?

  9. She is Abhijit…the last act of cleansing!

  10. granonine says:

    Yay! Applause! She freed herself of a bag of bricks she’d been toting around all those years. Gone! Great story.

  11. Violet Lentz says:

    Good job!! Both your writing and your characters getting rid of her long lost guy!!!

  12. 4963andypop says:

    Closure, so to speak.:)

  13. Liz Young says:

    ‘All smiles and hope’ – great use of words, and I am so glad she finally dumped him.

  14. StuHN says:

    The second tale I read of an errant male today. Glad you were able to give her closure for her heart to move on.

  15. Dale says:

    Too bad she was stuck for 13 years. At least now, she can rebuild her life.

  16. James McEwan says:

    Yep, liked the build up and the final act of courage.

  17. Danny James says:

    Lucky for him she didn’t throw the shoes at him.

  18. Dahlia says:

    Yes! About time too 😀 Very well done Anshu

  19. Such a complex story as a prompt response, well done.

    Regards, SLSM.

  20. lisarey1990 says:

    Gorgeously layered. A great read.

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